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The
First Ten Pages
Your Mission: Win the
Reader in ten pages or ten minutes, which ever comes first.
This article appeared
in the July/August 1994 issue of The New York Screenwriter Monthly
(http://www.screenwritersutopia.com/SM/advertising.htm.)
Ten minutes or ten
pages may not be much, but in the screenwriting industry it means
everything. The first ten pages (fifteen pages for the more liberal
reader) can either create an opportunity for a writer or take
it away. In ten minutes the writer needs to introduce the main
characters, establish the genre, let the reader or viewer know
generally what the story is about, and what is at stake.
"Everybody is so short
on time," says agent Marcia Amsterdam of New York based Marcia
Amsterdam Agency. "Everybodyís reading, itís sad
to say, for a reason not to take on something. Everybody over
schedules and has more writers than they can handle and more projects
than they should handle. Itís really tough on the writer
because they have to present a reason why this is different from
all other screenplays and do it on the first few pages."
Time is the biggest
reason why scripts are given a ten page limit. Agents, Producers,
Readers, Studio Execs are pressed for time. There are so many
scripts and so little time to read them. Unless they are certain
they are in for a good read, no one is willing to devote the 90
to 120 minutes it takes to read a screenplay only to end up passing
on it.
Writers should realize
agents read zillions of these things and they want to be surprised,"
adds Amsterdam. "I want to like what I read. People think that
you canít wait to send back the rejection notes." Rejection
is guaranteed if the writer fails to use the first ten pages to
draw the reader in. To accomplish this, the writer must make sure
that the script starts at the precise moment. A common error many
writers make in setting up the story is letting the crucial ten
pages go by filled with exposition and useless scenes, and then
starting the drama around page 30. Very few readers, unless the
writing is exceptional, will give the writer 30 or more pages
to set up the story. Selma Luttinger of New York based Robert
A. Freedman Dramatic Agency wants to be hooked and grabbed into
the story. "I want to know in ten pages what is going to happen
to these people," says Luttinger. "Sometimes not a lot can happen
in ten pages, so then I look at the quality of the writing. I
give it a fair shake, say 25 pages and then if Iím not
engrossed, I begin skimming.
" If it is not on the
page it will most likely not end up on the screen and if the first
ten pages drag with very little happening, the audience will file
out in droves for popcorn, talk, or snooze. Nothing is more frustrating
and boring to watch than a film that meanders around without giving
the audience a clear idea of what is happening and to whom it
is happening. "I want to get on the roller coaster and go for
the ride," says Amsterdam.
Setting up the drama
in the first ten pages is genre specific. Some genres take more
than ten pages to set up, thrillers for example, and it helps
to have exceptional writing and interesting characters to keep
the reader reading long enough to set up the story. "There are
different reasons why different things intrigue you or bore you,"
adds Luttinger. "Some people may be very good at writing dialogue
and theyíre not telling a story. Good dialogue is important.
It comes out of good characterization."
In the first ten pages
the characters need to be established, goals presented, and voice
delineated. The writer needs to set the protagonist or main character
against the antagonist or obstacles to his goal. In other words,
he has to find a way to make the reader or viewer care about the
main character. "I look for a certain vulnerability in the main
character," states Amsterdam. "Iím totally turned off by
obnoxious people or obnoxious screenplays. If the opening scene
is five people being obnoxious, then I donít care what
happens to any of them." The audience wants a hero, someone to
root for and if there is no clear hero that is established from
page one, unless it is an anthology piece, the reader will be
confused and inevitably turned off.
The writer should also
try to avoid using gratuitous sex, violence, and obscenities to
draw the reader in. If it cannot be done through character motivation
and plot, adding unnecessary scenes will get in the way of telling
the story. Devices that are not motivated by the characters but
by the writers pen are a sure mark of an amateur. Facing the blank
page and deciding what needs to be established in the first ten
pages is difficult and no one really knows what they are looking
for specifically. "Itís a feel actually," adds Michael
Amato of New York based Michael Amato Theatrical Agency. "I canít
tell you what you need to put in or not, youíve got to
use your creative juices."
Creative juices are
slow to flow and this is usually evident in the first few pages
of a script. The start of a screenplay is usually the weakest
because the writer is just getting to know his characters and
their situation. There is an awkward stage until about page 45
to 60 when the character begins to tell the writer where he wants
to go and the writer is willing to let him take over the journey.
A common mistake many writers make is not closely examining the
first ten pages during the rewrite phase, making sure that the
character is consistent throughout.
Before sending out
that script the writer must look over the first fifteen pages,
paying the closest attention to the first ten. The writer has
one shot to convince the reader to keep turning pages and if in
the first ten, the reader is not swayed, the script faces certain
rejection. With over 20,000 scripts registered with the Writers
Guild each year it should come as no surprise that agents and
producers can handle the workload. Why? Because the vast majority
of these screenplays get only ten minutes of their precious time.
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